veronicafletcher

Here's another photo of Natalie in the yellow shirt. Same old swing.... different angle.

Here's one of her on the same swing...

Here are some pics of my little sister. I hope they're good, because it took me about an hour to force her into that dress... :P

It's okay but it's you which isn't okay :!: This is what I have to say:

Plip. Plip. Plip. Plip-plop, plip-plop. Plip-SHWASH! Plop-KACHANG! SHWASH! KA-CHANG! SHWASH! The gleaming metal fountain Turns on in the morning. Starts with a trickle, Like a dove’s coo. Building a

Do you guys think that this even has a chance, or should I just give up on it? Thank you for the comments!

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First of all, Jamie did not kill her father. And second, you will see why the bat only has one blood sample on it. I think I'm going to reverse ...

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OK I updated it, with a little more detail.

I also agree with cadmium. This is not poetry. It's just a continued children's rhyme. Furthermore, it makes no sense whatsoever.

That was a good approach, but you need to be serious. Stop posting junk!

Fishface- Stop. Just stop. The junk you post as either already been written or is just dumb. Stop before you are kicked out of here for good.

Great. You have amazing talent, and I loved the whole '5 Things You Should Know About Me' thing. I personally think you should have waited to explain why you don't ...

your once raging power; now not racing at all How is the power raging and racing? Try revising 'now not'. You also used 'rage' twice in the poem. Try changing ...