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I felt no pain as I blinked my eyes opened. For a minute all I could see was the whiteness of the hospital room, but as my eyes adjusted I ...

OK there's not much left for me to say pandapez pretty much covered it all. I think your story line is good, but like pandapez said you need more feeling ...

I blinked repeatedly but my eyes were still unused to the unusual darkness around me. u need a coma before the "but" I tried to stand but felt ropes cut ...

idk about anybody else, but I know I really want to here more and wondering where and how far are u going with this. katie this is good writting u ...

If you want to read this story go to Trainwreck- chapter one by Alfreto :D

Ok I apoligize ahead of time if this is too long, but chapter 10 is really short and I haven't posted in a while. Please read on because chapter ten ...

September 8th, 2006, the first time I walked down the hallways as a senior. I had my two best friends by my side, Heather and Ashley. We have been inseparable ...

This was a really good short story I liked the beginning with all the detail about the beach and the happy ending. the only thing that I saw that you ...

When the movie was over and we were back at my house, I stood in the bathroom staring at myself in the mirror. The short turquoise dress sat on my ...

This was really good, I loved it! :D I liked how you used a very short simple story and made it longer by adding many of your thoughts about it. ...

She was the girl you want but never able to get her, you need a coma before the "but" "Niki, Trevor's coming you better pull your act together." Stevie said. ...

When I opened my eyes, I was in was in my own room in my bed. The sun shone brightly through my opened window. Remembering what happened last night, I ...

Ok this is good. :D There are only a few places where you forgott the coma, but when you reread it your sure to find them. I like how you ...

ok I don't really know where your going with this. I liked the way you put detail and emotion into this, but I can't see why you started with when ...

Jasper turned left to right in front of the mirror inside the Hollister store, admiring the new clothes he was trying on. He wore a gray Hollister shirt and a ...