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Thanks! I've composed another edit that might help clear things up. I appreciate it.

Thank you, your advice was greatly appreciated!

Thank you, your advice was greatly appreciated!

Thank you, I'm applying these edits now!

Thank you! This helps me a lot! I wound up adding that it was too large a mark to be from another child, as well as including a ring mark. ...

Hey, thank you! This helps me a lot! Stephanie is lying about the ghost hurting her, in order to protect her mother. In the scene previous, she refers to the ...

You make some great points. This was done during a 20 minute speed contest, and the judge said she didn't think any of us could write something sad about cereal, ...

Thank you for reading. Larry's indifference/frustration with his ex will be explained later on (in short, he has severe commitment issues despite caring for her) and the title will be ...

Thanks for the feedback. I think I fit too many details into my sentences instead of splitting them, it's something I'm trying to work on fixing. I'll definitely take that ...

Thank you for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's something of a character study in a spiritual/paranormal setting. I'll have the rest posted soon enough.

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I don't find this irritating to read. There's nothing irritating in reading about self-harm imo, and the rating for this is already set as having mature content. I think it ...

Thank you! I definitely need to fix my opening. Alta works in a mental ward, so "psychiatric nurse" It's unfortunate she's ill herself but she has a different insite than ...

Thank you!

My opening was supposed to be what was going on in her mind in the following paragraph, but maybe it's too choppy to tell?

Thanks. Actually, the original document glitched and doubled the story, if you understand? So the beginning part kept looping, and I had to keep fixing it. I can't seem to ...