tortured_artboy

“Retrograde” Shadows are thrown onto the rocky path Stretching, sinewy shadows that play with muted stones They are the animated corpses of the sun’s wrath Casts of nature’s bare and ...

I doubt a vampire could get frostbite. :wink: Well, thanks for the compliment about the beginning but maybe you could offer real advice next time. :roll: Thank you.

Sorry that the paragraphs are not spaced. I hope it is not too confusing this way. :cry:

A steel mist filled the streets of Moscow in heavy swirls while a light snow was slowly beginning to fall on the moist pavement. The sky was an ominous gray ...

I liked it a lot. You've got a lot of talent for a youngster :wink: The only thing I think hindered your story was the description of clothing. Most guys ...

Yeah actually this is the second part of my story. I didn't want to post part one because I really like it and I'd hate to have it ripped apart ...

That must have taken a long time to research but it was very interesting. I may have to modify my story now for the sake of accuracy :)

The wheels of the old carriage dug deeply into the winding gravel road, sending into the sky a crushing sound that echoed without end. The intruding sound seemed to drown ...