torsa_n_muse

Just about a rhyme The curtained isle summons wearied off eyes Sylvan aroma soothes clouded soul’s skies. And crouching there one sits firm on fancy To hear silent times bashful ...

Techno-marriage It was 5 years back when we received a rather strange invitation from a family friend’s son on his wedding. I hadn’t met him before but had heard of ...

hi boni, :D i agree to some of your comments but by and large you have misinterpreted the piece. here first of all the 'he' is the almighty our protector ...

i know this ones a discouragingly long piece, but give it a try. it wont bore you to at least write if you thought this was good or bad! -torsa

loser's defence was an experimental effort and feels like it didnt work too well. but thanks for your take on this poem, criticism like this definitely helps! :) -torsa

thank you for your criticism. i have got rid of some of the 'the' in stanza one and yes i realise it sounds better. thank you again! :D -torsa

Dawn of creation The clouds roared, wind cried. The moon glistened, and sun sighed. Earth enforced its wish with all might, Time enforced its ultimate right- All asking the creator ...

Trance It was clearing up…from dizzy, To a touchable entity but yet was not still. It was dancing to and fro. Sometimes going out of frame. Then as on a ...

A night’s tale He sang all night, no matter what! Darkness and its black gala mantle, Was tightening it grip, Knotting and trying to suffocate us. His subtle fingers could ...

your poem has chosen a good theme but it is too flat for a literary piece. "Let everyone sing and everyone dance, while she lies in this empty, forgotten room ...

hi angel, thank you for your compliments. truly excited when someone likes this poem! -torsa

Loser’s Defence Give me thy ensign, Let me carry it high. Bestow me with power divine. O stop the wind and stop the water, From washing my forehead. Only you ...

:) thanks for all your comments. i will keep the critcism in my mind, when i write a new poem. -torsa

i am happy to get such aesome response from you all. i am really thrilled. i have not been able to catch up with all the response for some time, ...

it was wonderful to know thatb you people liked this one. actually this poem is very close to my heart.