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I didn't really like her new album at all. Her first one was way better. The new one was way too cliche and you can tell she's trying way too ...

I'm gonna make it to 93! WOOHOO! Though if I follow the pattern of every old person in my family, I'll die between 65-85, though I am healthier than most ...

I love this idea! There's not enough Christian stories out there. I'll definitely try to read and review the script. Good luck! God Bless!

There's no sure fire way to improve your writing, it takes time and a lot of practice. They say reading helps, I have read many books and only recently did ...

Thanks Carlito. I made an edit to it, so hopefully it's better now. There definitely is a country twang to it :) Country is my favorite genre and most of ...

Thanks everyone! :)

I wrote these over two years ago in 6th grade, so don't be afraid to tear them apart. :wink: ~~~~~~~~~~ A summer twister Crushing an evenings silence Everything is dead. ...

I agree with Rosey. (She's always right!!!) The shorter lines make it way too difficult to read. Otherwise, I really like it. :) It turns out you chose one of ...

I didn't really understand it at first, but after I thought about it I was moved to tears. If I'm correct, it's about a mother who's in an abusive relationship ...

Played to a slow acoustic guitar melody. Little Girl Verse 1 A white ceiling above her head Pink walls surrounding her bed Been that way since she was three Protected ...

BUT.... I feel like I am reading a story sometimes, your lines are just too long. I agree with May on that. I actually like the long lines, the story ...

I love it. :) There are only two nit picks I have. 1. Each new line needs to be capitalized. That's just a basic poem-grammar thing. 2. Try to be ...

Crit welcomed :) No criticism needed at all! That was beautiful! I love how you make it rhyme and flow very nicely with out it sounding forced. I can just ...

Thanks Quetseli :) You really boosted my confidence right there. I'm going to post more of my stories now. :)

Very well done. :) All of the verses matched perfectly with the original song, though I couldn't really picture the chorus. And as for the "do the Dumbledore and dance ...