tommyknocker

How old is your brother? Anyhow, it took me two or three read overs to fully understand this very short story. But i think if your brother was to stretch ...

I ain't feeling the emotion your trying to convey here. I like it, don't get me wrong. But, try to immerse yourself in the character, become the person in this ...

Well, you reviewed mine so i will return the favor. (But be warned I'm not that good at critiquing) Ah, at the very start i was confused. But i soon ...