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Hi there! I liked the idea here but there's a few questions that i feel are left un-answered. Who is she? A person that has supernatural abilities, i got that ...

Hi there. Good job on this story. I think most people on this site are teens and they could relate to this. All i could say is that at the ...

What made you shiver and your heart race with fear? I'll start, i was riding my motorbike in the bush, woods, forest. (Whatever you call it in your part of ...

Hi. i don't usually read poems. But i clicked on one, you know just for the casual glance. I'm no expert, but i really enjoyed reading this. I like how ...

Hi, hey this real good, but real short. I implore you to expand on this and make a great story, to go with a great opening paragraph. Remember the path ...

Hi. I like this story. May i say your style is terrific! However at the end, i come away thinking is she dying? Has she died? Why?? Also, i feel ...

Hi, Jaybe. Tomm here to comment. If this was a first chapter of a paperback novel, i dunno what I'd think. It's very short. Perhaps prologue length. Okay, i like ...

Hi. Okay this seems rushed. But i understand that this was a spur of the moment story about what happened at this "business class." Also, there's quite a few capital ...

Haha, okay this sweet. I love the fact that it's a true story. However. I agree with Funkymomo. There is no, plot. It's just you like this guy and there ...

Hi i really like this piece. You kept it simple and fresh. I think the oppression of fat girls in everything is oversued. Especially in school environments. But you have ...

This is me. With considerable effort, i figured out how to upload. Hooray. Well it didn't work. It's a link now. Sorry for the singlet showing in the pic, i ...

Hi there. First off I'd like to say that i liked the title of your story. I agree with TabbyGirl. After i finish this, i feel this feeling of wanting ...

Hi there. This is rather short for a post. But i hope you finish story off. Anyway. There's a few grammatical errors in this. But i don't really care. We ...

Hi. I'd just liked to say i loved this story and i could feel the emotion. Well done. But, i don't get this. This girls is in love with this ...

I don't really read much into the origin of a characters name. If say, your character had some, "Super Duper Chocolate Coated Mega Name." But you didn't develop the personality ...