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Re: Dear Kitty
I swear, I literally cried when I read this. It reminded me of my childhood. So many emotions washed over me, but it had a good feeling to it. It ...
Tue Jun 28, 2011 1:37 am -
Re: The Eagle and I
All I can say is that this was an amazing, well written poem. I have never read such a great poem like this one before. At first, I couldn't tell ...
Tue Jun 28, 2011 1:21 am -
Re: Can one person make a difference?
Oh, my gosh. That was so deep, so inspiring, it captured my heart. It really makes you think how society wants us to be and what we sometimes wants to ...
Tue Jun 28, 2011 12:32 am -
Re: That Unknown Feeling Chapter 3
Thanks, HollowPoint! You know, i'm glad that youre helping me with constructive criticism. it actually helps and it works out! Just to let you know, i'll leave the subconscious arguments ...
Mon Jun 13, 2011 12:53 pm -
Re: That Unknown Feeling Chapter 3
"Mom! Dad! Lu!" I shouted. My paws pounded on the pavement as I raced back to my house. The scent of fire was in the air and I became afraid. ...
Sun Jun 12, 2011 9:07 pm -
Re: Nightling's Necklace, Chapter Two
Wow that was a good chapter. Now I'm not one to nitpick bur I did see a few errors that you might want to look over. But other than that, ...
Sat Jun 11, 2011 3:37 pm -
Re: Options
Wow why stop there? I say keep writing! Leaving the story hanging like that keeps me and other readers wanting more. Grammar, spelling was great. There would only be one ...
Sat Jun 11, 2011 12:19 am -
Re: Keeper Prologue
So yeah the other reviewers caught the grammar and nick pick stuff like that. I'd say it was great, but you said you don't like people telling you that it's ...
Sat Jun 11, 2011 12:10 am -
Re: Nightling's Necklace, Chapter One
Wow. That's all I can say. That was an amazing beginning. It just yanked me right in and I couldn't stop reading. Grammar, spelling, punctuation, all correct. I found nothing ...
Fri Jun 10, 2011 11:58 pm -
Re: Voiceless
That story was very captivating! From the beginning, it immediately captured my attention. I could not stop reading and now I can't stop waiting. You have to write the next ...
Fri Jun 10, 2011 11:35 pm -
Re: That Unknown Feeling Chapter 2
Chapter 2 When the first rays of the sun crept into my room, I stirred. My eyes slowly opened; my room aglow with bursts of purple, yellow and orange light. ...
Fri Jun 10, 2011 9:55 pm -
Re: That Unknown Feeling (Title Pending)
Prologue: Before I begin to tell you my story, you should know a little about my life. First of all, my name is Mukuka. Most people can't even pronounce it, ...
Thu Jun 09, 2011 12:39 pm -
Re: Annexation: Chapter One
Wow. I'd have to say this was a really good start to your book. Most everyone has picked out my nitpicks, so I'll just say all the good and bad ...
Mon Mar 07, 2011 11:11 pm -
Re: Which Way Chapters Three-Five
Hmm, what should I say about this? First of all, it's a good story through and through. But you can make the chapters a little longer. That way, you can ...
Mon Mar 07, 2011 10:56 pm -
Re: When I Fell Pregnant [March]
Oh my gosh, I love this book. It has to be one of my favorite books on this site. The emotions, the drama, the details make it seem so real, ...
Mon Mar 07, 2011 10:23 pm
