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Hi, PSW! :D I like the beginning of this, but there's something about referring to her horse as 'the' which just doesn't seem quite right, I think that you could ...

Hey silentpages :D I quite like this, and the idea behind it, but there are a couple of things I wanted to bring up: The relationship between Izzie and Neb: ...

Hi, Cspr :D you always remind me of the friendly ghost lol. Love took in the cemetery This really threw me for a loop. It took me quite a while ...

I have to apologise because I have the feeling I am the reason that this has such a high number of page views. I kept dipping in and out of ...

Hey, DW! :D I should start of by saying that I'm not too familiar with Ice and Fire , so apologies for if I mention anything that would make sense ...

Hey, PSW! This has been on my reading list for a while, but I've only just gotten the time to have a proper read of everything :D The wine burned ...

Hi! :D This actually sounds pretty similar to something me and one of my friends used to do. We'd pick a prompt, either a song or a picture or a ...

Hi! :D I think, first off, you need a snappier beginning. It's not bad, but it doesn't really have that hook that catches you, drags you in, and refuses to ...

Hi! :D This is pretty short, so there isn't really a great deal to day. I think you've got a neat little idea here, mermaids drawing sailors in to their ...

'Ello 'ello :D Joseph’s bare feet left red liquid footprints on the cool, debris-covered cement. His feet were torn, destroyed from months without proper shoes. The bolded part irked me, ...

Hi! I actually really like the perspective that this takes, I've seen too many things that paint school shootings as being carried out by cold, heartless, ruthless monsters, and tend ...

Hi, GG! I quite like this, you've got those feelings that all of us have at some point at another -- frustration with our writing, writers block, struggling to stay ...

Hi! I can see what you were trying to go for, but I wouldn't really say that this is second person -- it's very much more written in the first. ...

Hi! This is such a short nugget of a piece, and so I don't really have a great deal to say. A couple of more nitpicky comments: A peep, the ...

Hi, Christy! It was the creak of your door that alerted me, drawing me away from homework and music to stare out my window. For a second or two, I ...