timjim77

There are two lines in this poem that I question the validity of. 1. this is all abstract: 2. Say I love you in spite of. The obviousness of them ...

Excellent, brilliant, awesome. Take a conventional poetic form. Take a conventional subject. Come up with something unconventional. Take limiting iambic pentameter. Take limiting rhyme structure. Surp

Wonderful imagery, and great title. Watch your punctuation in a few places, especially the semicolon. I love the last stanza. What a wonderful way to describe it, 'waiting to be ...

First point, poems don't have to be long. It's a fine length. Also, don't preface your poetry with comments like that. Of course, there are some exceptions to the rule. ...

Very nicely written. This poem has reached its zenith I think. The subject matter is often picked by amateurs, but you handle it with a wise hand. Watch awkward line ...

I agree with Snoink. once again you display your talent, but this poem does not reach its or your potential. 'Gliterrati' throws the flow, as does the guilt thing. And ...

Stop smiling because I know your ovaries; They’re not smiling at all. I feel like there is hair in my mouth Every time you call. "Remind me of your soul ...

I'm back too... Woo.

Thank you. The story is in Non-Fiction because it is based on true events in my life.

Hmm. Sappho meets Elizabeth Barret Browning on LSD. Perhaps. Or maybe it's another original by CL. But, to be brutally honest, this poem is not your best. Now, it's not ...

This poem was quite cute, yet it didn't come off as being trite. Simple and sweet. I liked it. I wish I could rumba into the fiery sunset. Good imagery.

I am only as happy as you perceive me to be.

Judith fed her soul to lions But their jaws were glued with fear All her attempts of trying Would always disappear She marched ahead alone and false Marched towards the ...

It's difficult to get perspective in overhead shots. The use of shading and shadow can improve perspective. Also countour lines on the handle of the knife. The straight lines are ...

Awesome as always. You just keep getting better. I do have suggestions though. The "whatever" on the end of one line should either be removed or moved down to the ...