timjim77

In this world of ours, where one can never keep one’s thoughts straight for more than a fraction of a second until some all-infecting cosmic disaster lay its hands upon ...

The blissfulness Of listlessness Lying in a sweet summer blanket Wrapped in heat and swarms Of honeyed sunbeams Requisites of helium Exploding infinitely Consuming endlessly Yearning slightly for Less

Incredible. One of your most beautiful.

Dylan Thomas, Emily Dickinson.

I agree and disagree with rose. I disagree because poetry is not the written form of emotions. Pure emotion is what makes for poor poetry. I think this is what ...

Underneath your layers There lies a core Underneath your scabs There lies a sore Echoes from eternity Bouncing off the satellites Things begin with explosions Let’s all explode tonight Your ...

Something out of nothing Is the mantra I keep Don’t close your soul Faith may miss the leap Asking for signs When your asking is it Makes seeds start to ...

While you may nto have been aiming for this (i doubt you were), this strikes somewhat of eighth century Chinese poetry. A little more imagery woulod fill it out. And ...

The relationship of birth and sex was well played. Watch diction. The attention of your reader may get caught up in words like "dystopia" rather than the meaning of your ...

My guess is you were listneing to Ben's Reinhold Messner album. Or his first solo one. This poem has very good language, and creative construction. It could use some compression. ...

I'm guessing this is parody. But the subject og the parody is vague, other than poorly written poetry. I did like your jumbled syntax. That was amusing.

Lovely lovely. Use punctuation and in this line: "Still I feel his soul cry out to me" remove the word out. Supreme job.

Nice work. One more thing. You need some punctuation. The lines flow too much into each other and it becomes confusing. Congrats, you have a great poem on your hands. ...

The first part of this poem is the part requiring the most revision. Alone and alone and alone evermore, Isolated, outcast, made to leave, shut the door. Wand ‘ring far, ...

Thanks. Edit made.