timjim77

I think that the first few lines of this poem are a self-fulfilling prophecy.

"is all anyone seas": Should be sees. "First grader sitting in his seat Waiting for Iraq to admit defeat His daddys been gone, he knows why And his mom lays ...

I found this to be trite. It did not achieve what it attempted. First of all, you talk of the wruistband generation, and speak of at least two different generations. ...

Enjoyable and witty. But it sounds a bit pretentious. If you poked fun at your own pretentiousness, then it would be an even better poem .But i truly did enjoy ...

I liked it as a poem, and I can hear an even better song behind it. Really liked it. I liked the chorus more than the verses.

Lay to waste your ill-worn gloves Remove the yellowed skin of ages Brush through the thick waters of grief And emerge with the fire of the river. Bare your feet ...

Love it. you have an eye for design and pattern. Reminds e a little of Navajo weaving. The pointillism is great too. Probably the best example I've seen of it ...

Liked it. The flow was coppy, intentionally, but I think that if the idea of what you were trying to say was better developed, the poem may have hit a ...

I remember, far in some distant dream When Earth was lit by awesome splendor, too, When holy men did shine in brightest gleam As bells in towers struck their chords ...

It's pretty good. It does flow really nicely, everything was well described which I thought was really good. The only problem is - Is that your main character sounds a ...

Spanish adds a nice flavor, but the English lacks depth.

I don't believe that self-interest ever wins over truth. In fact, I know it doesn't. To avoid pain by denying the truth is cowardly. The truth is all we have. ...

Thanks people. I'm a tough critique, just so you know, and don't take it personally. i hope you critique tough too.

This is an example of what is called emo litereature. Great imagery. While I'm not a fan of emo, and I don't agree with its message, the majority of this ...

interesting. I have heard this before. Hopefully you posted somwhere else and did not plagarize.