timjim77

I have to say that I do not like this poem. It is very self-indulgent. it is a stream of consciousness, which is interesting, but sometimes it gets so far ...

I get the sense of someone speaking from a soapbox. not necessarily in a bad sense. But it has a jagged feel to it, which is fine, except the somewhat ...

Funny and funny.

Watch frocing rhymes. And an AAAA rhyme scheme is quite diffiult to pull off. Try ABAB or something similar to that.

The broken structure of this poem reflects the content. I love that.

i don't know how anyone can call this cliche. I loved the line "A man destined to burn can never drown." Classic. Great job.

Hmm. Provocative. The simplicity gives a nice backdrop for the emotion. nice work.

Ugh.

The pew is hard To sit in, and I feel my Fingers trembling in the cold. And the words of St. Paul Echo through the steely microphone “Just as through ...

It'd be really great with a killer guitar solo after the third chorus. Then the guitars should fade out and all you're left with is a drum beat for the ...

Delete.

Deleted. I don't remember ever being so emo and reading so much Carl Jung.

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"Good causes are thought up in boardrooms. Morals are bought and sold. Philosophies for the New Age consumer.": This refers to the Baby Boomer generation. our generation is not the ...

The last one you posted, the designs, is the best one by far. It is excellent. I want a copy. Haha!