timjim77

This has become one of my favorite poems on the site. I've read it again and again. The potency of it is captured in the final line. That final line ...

I guess it's a girl thing, because I didn't get this. I understood the cncept, but I just didn't find it at all moving or even worthwhile. I would love ...

This "stream of consciousness" was interesting and raw. I loved lines like "I don’t need therapy, I need to therapy myself" or "For once I want to say ‘no, it ...

Music geeks are everywhere. Those are the people that are more than willing to talk for two hours about how Kraftwerk is the most underrated band of all time, buy ...

Loved the use of alliteration. Don't see that often any more. Poems have volumes. Sometimes you will read the first line of a poem, like Dylan Thomas' Do Not Go ...

Very clever. Nice job on such a difficult assignment. Corny, yes. But delightfully corny.

“Welcome to my world” is a bit of a lame duck opening. Especially since the lights go down after that. The intensity of the one line is good. But what ...

Inca, you're overanalyzing a bit here. No wonder you don't feel floored by the emotion. You're reading with your head. (But I usually love your critiues. Just disagree on this ...

Show, don't tell. This is essential. Do not underestimate the reader. Now read carefully, because this might sound strange at first: it is better to leave a detail out then ...

Hmm. Doesn't do much as a character sketch, since we don't see anything really unique about these characters. Pretty stereotypical of dramatic personages. Horny guys. Hard-to-get women, struggling fro

Oedipus anyone? While it was somewhat amusing, the end was a bit too gory for me. And the lesbian sex with your mother is kinda...cliche. I see that way too ...

This poem seemed....bipolar. Couldn't make heads or tails of it. It had too manyaspects, and none were defined clearly. It was like a literary attempt at cubism, without really knowing ...

I liked the political incorrectness. But to me, it didn't seem so much of a balad, as a story told in poem form. Balads are usually long, and have a ...

So, let me see some more emotion, darling, less heart. I don’t want poetry, my dear, I want to see you fall apart. This made me excited. For you. This ...

This should be in Dramatic Poetry. See my critique on your other poem in Dramatic POetry.