timberM618

Your story is off to a very good start. but to make it better, i suggest going back and re-read what you wrote. ou seem to put comas in unnecessary ...

i have to hand it to you, you do know how to make a story very action packed. just afew things you can do to improve the story "He suddenly ...

Very interesting story. there is the ocassional typo here and there but other than that its great! A+ 4 u!

I really like the story so far. CAn't wait to see what happens next!

Hey yall. I'm new to this writers society gig. i mainly write fiction stories along the lines of harry potter, narnia, and a bunch of my other fav books, so ...