tigershark17

Shout out! I've already done 30.

Well, there are a lot of conventional errors, and they are very distracting. However, that being said, it is a good idea. Work on sentence fluency too. Vary your length ...

This was a great idea; really cool! If you're going to list plots, have you read "The Seven Basic Plots" by Christopher Booker? If not, you should, even if it's ...

Okay, still some grammatical errors, but the voice is good and I love the name XAvier, by the way. i have a similar character, XAnder, in one of my novels. ...

Awesome! Okay, so, I use the six traits writing system, which means I'll list each trait, a rating from 1-6, (6-high, 1-low) and comments for each. Let's get this party ...

WOw! Okay, first off I just want to mention that I don't even think I saw any punctuational errors, which is just awesome because nearly everything I've reviewed so far ...

Hmmm... This is very interesting! I have never really been into werewolves at all, but this is good, very good! Congrats on being able to draw me in enough to ...

Wow. You have a really unique writer's voice and an excellent use of vocabulary. One thing that would make both of those better though is to adjust your sentences. Some ...

WOw, this sounds really interesting! I haven't actually read the previous chapters yet, but I have jsut a few things to say about this. First, your writer's voice is excellent. ...

This seems like it's all dialogue. Try to add some more detail about what's really going on too. You have good sentence fluency and word skills, so great job on ...

Hey "thevoiceinside", how ya doin'? Well, my friend, it appears as through I am first! Yaay! *waves arms excitedly* So, I use the six traits writing system, which basically means ...

Hey Starlight! *waves excitedly* Welcome to YWS! I hope you're lovin' it so far; I have only been here a couple weeks and am already addicted! Anyway, looking forward to ...

Ooh, very good! OKay, so, I use the six traits writing system to review, which just means I tell you how you did on the traits and give you a ...

Hi! Okay, first, what's with the underscores??? (in the title, that is) I really like the imagery you use in this; your descriptions are excellent. This is great! Keep up ...

Hey! This is cool! Soccer? That was just awesome the way you kinda left us hanging and then hit us with it at the end. Great job; this was a ...