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Re: The Movie of Darby Jane's Life
[pre] The Movie of Darby Jane’s Life Chapter One The sprinklers are on, whirring with life, and Darby thinks about sprinting through, but he’s cutting across the park to save ...
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Re: A man changed by a boy
On your next piece, maybe avoid the cliches. The message and the ending, it's all a bit much. Your heart's in the right place, but a story can illustrate a ...
Mar 5, 2008 -
Re: I Think I'm In Love #2
I don't know if you mean for the character to sound so juvenile. I know fourteen isn't old, not at all, but it feels like she's acting the way fourteen-year-old ...
Mar 5, 2008
