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Re: rebirth
Ohhh, I liked this! I really did. I wish I could write this way :( I recoiled. I wouldn't use the word recoiled in this instance. You already bombard the ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: Remembering her
Hello! I'm tennis. Here is your review: The loneliness sings a lullaby to me,One that cannot induce any sleep, felt like there should have been a period after induce. It ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: Mom
Very sweet of you to write to your mom. When I have a son, I hope he loves writing just as much as I do. You're great (: I'm tennis, ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: 7-9-09 Dreams
Short but sad :( I could make that emotional connection to the piece... By the slick surface of the pond. I wouldn't have used the word slick here..don't think it ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: I want to feel alive
Interesting piece. I wouldn't call it poetry though...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: My poem - "A Gift From Me To I"
Hey, I'm Tennis!! Welcome to YWS! Oh boy, I remember the first day I signed up... good times, good times. I hope you enjoy our community, enhance your writing experience, ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: Colourblind
Talk about an impressive ending! Sheesh, I was overwhelmed. Very intricate title, indeed. For the most part, I thought this was fabulous. It's a style of poetry I don't think ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: lost in thought
I stare at the wall but my mind wonders into the depths of my thoughts, line sounded awkward to me. Try cutting it up a bit, often works well with ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: Removed #8
Thanks for the review! And yes, tennis is my life! RAFA NADAL
Dec 27, 2009 -
Re: Removed #8
Topic has been removed.
Dec 26, 2009 -
Re: Removed #8
The Idea of snow in the summer was to symbolize a sort of "never ending winter" in the life of a person in which they are always cold. It was ...
Oct 24, 2009 -
Re: Removed #8
Topic has been removed.
Oct 24, 2009 -
Re: Removed #7
Topic has been removed.
Mar 24, 2009 -
Re: I can make it better
Well, everyone on here is thirteen and up so I don't think it needs to be rated. It isn't too explicit. Anyways onto your review. Go out and have your ...
Mar 19, 2009 -
Re: Time, unstoppable time
Hey! We meet again! What a vivid piece! It really allows the reader to imagine and uses some great descriptions. I had a few minor issues with a little things ...
Mar 19, 2009
