thewonderworldofnight

Okay, I like this world you've created. It's very... dark , very black. But there are some things which are bothering me. Your character, Gink, thinks details. No one really ...

I really like your idea and what you've written so far. It's catchy, it keeps your audience reading. now for some critiquing. what happened with Tristan and Elizabeth? You can ...

Hey! Welcome :) I'm Deoris...hope to see you around the forums! ps: this is the perfect op. to test out storywriting...I'm actually the other way around when it comes to ...

aww, man, Tibet...can i come on your next vacation?! my fav was definitely the monk and the motorcycle...the hills were nice...and just the idea of a monk and a motorcycle ...

I really like her...her clothes are really pretty (not in the annoying sense of the word, but in the good ol' "yo ho" sense of it) ;-) just a question...did ...

For box 3, you spelled "sentence" as "sentance", so...thought i'd correct you there... also, PLEASE number this according to order, as i'm not really sure exactly what's going on. The ...

My favs are definitely 3 and 4. Just wondering, what kind of camera are you using? Because your pictures (minus the flame one) were really clear, I WANT YOUR CAMERA!!! ...

So pick up a paint brush and create my mural. This seems kind of random; you go from "you never see me" to "pick up a paintbrush". Maybe a little ...

I think I was recommended this site by a friend, but I can't remember who...also, I was tired of getting critiques from friends who refused to give constructive criticism because ...

aww, Lovevol is adorable :-) I definitely agree with Adam_Atlantian, you should write stories about him. Mayhap, if you can draw cartoons (which I can't, so if you can I ...

Okay, this probably sounds cliche, but I hear your voice in this and it's really good. I also really like your metaphors. Now to the crticism. What is this about? ...

that was good in a depressing way. I didn't read 1984 yet, but it must be good to get this sort of writing! I don't have any critiques as of ...

Depending, I show it to my mom, my 7th/8th english teacher (it sounds kinda corny, yes, but he's AMAZING and understanding), or my 3 friends, though lately I've shown it ...

If anyone here has read The Fall of Atlantis by Marion Zimmer Bradley, that's the sort of way I write. It's third person, but at certain point it focuses on ...

Okay, this is sad in a really good, cute way! If I were you, I'd definitely write more about this! Also, a few things: --Is Alexial a real goddess/immortal or ...