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I think it was okay but like the others said it need more emotion. Also, I think for this"so why dont try looking forward instead" you should try saying Why ...

I kind of like this, it gave a sense of mystery which, I think greatly added to the poem. Also, it makes the reader want to find out who this ...

I kind of liked this some of it seemed a little off though. Like "Which way do I make you understand?" I think this would sound better if you said ...

Your organs are going weaker as your body awaits its final peril. So young you didn’t stand a chance. Your body is being lowerd into its final resting place as ...

I am guessing that someone gave you those points otherwise, the points system is felling generous today. Anyway, I will stop taking about this inconsequential topic. Um… Welcome to YWS ...

I know it doesn't seem like much to some of you but it means something to me. (= 50 more to go until another star I think. I hope I ...

Oh okay. (= *Parties*

Umm. 5000 what? Posts?

It seems more like a message to a friend than a poem. Sense, you wanted this to be about your friend I think perhaps, a poem about what they mean ...

I think it was kind of vexatious how you keep repeating things inevitably. I think I would rewrite this so it sounds better perhaps, work on forming imagery about how ...

I think this was a good poem; it gave the sense of melancholy thus, giving the poem the emotion that you intended for it to have. Sorry about you losing ...

Um..... Nate you know that your link leads to a music video right? Did you intentionally mean for this?

I kind of agree with spike71294 it didn't really seem to be in a poem format. But, I did like this though. It seems to tell a story which, I ...

I kind of like this poem it was written very well and I think you capture how you truly feel about this person. At first, I thought the last line ...

I thought it was okay it could be better though and I think it's kind of short. And, there is so much repletion of "Lord oh Lord." Which I think ...