theotherone

Hello Twinnette :) I just came here to congratulate your friend here, Kaylee? “I’ll go shower, before it gets crowded comma, ” I said, turning away “Hum comma, no thanks. ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks, hope you don't mind! :) How many moments in your life can you say, "This is where it all changed" ? F ...

Hello. :) I have some nitpicks again... It might be just me being over the top though. My parents hadn’t yet returned home when I got home. The repetition of ...

Hello there. :) I'll start with the nitpicks. What can I say, I'm a nitpicker. :) His voice was full and reassured in himself , “you are really good.” His ...

Hello. :) I have a few nitpicks for you. I love it when you do that. Or at least I did. "you did that?" I'm not sure if it's better ...

Hello there! :) I don't have any nitpicks for you, I'm so sorry... It's really rare I don't give some, but to be frank, I didn't even scan for them, ...

Hello there. :) “Come on, I’ll show you around. They’re both at work,” he said as he lead me inside. He kissed at my skin, where my neck connected to ...

Hello there. :) Down by the train tracks it was silent . Silently , I exhaled seeing my foggy breath in the chilly night. You repeated Silent two times... You ...

Hello there. :) “Do not tell me how I feel comma ” he growls, pulling my small frame closer to his, as if to prove his point, a point that ...

Hello there. :) I took Dreaming's review, so I know what has been done and what hasn't. My corrections will be in blue, okay? No friends. No family. And no ...

Hello there. :) I like the introduction of this book. It seems really interesting and intriguing. There's not much details about the characters, so I hope these are coming in ...

Hello there. :) He is like on fire. And they dance until the dawn. This was a rather confusing story. I don't feeling I know the guy and his conflict ...

Hello there. :) And I have been living in a foster home for about two years. I have to agree with Wicked and say that this is really choppy. Blend ...

Hello there. :) “Why are you asking ?” Lily brought her free hand up and began examining her nails as she said I think it sounds better that way, but ...

Hello there. :) I don't have nitpicks since I wasn't really paying attention to that when I was reading. I've got to say that this story was pretty good, and ...