theotherone

Hi, Im TheOtherOne, I love how all the newbies are introducing themselves! I guess I'll do the same then. ;) I love to write... I actually wrote two novels, one ...

Hi there :) First for the grammar, your major errors here are the comma's. You need them in a work to make the sentence less choppy and make it flow ...

Hey you :) One thing I have to say is that you drew only the main lines... You need depth and shadows in there in order to make them look ...

Hi :) okay, so first, i would like to point out some sentences that got me a little bit confused. In my unruly English class my teacher decided to step ...

Hi, I agree with Jessica, it's not long enough for us to know your characters and the story line. I know it, since I've already read your story, but other ...

hey! I love the way you write and the details. I could see Draven and Lila talking on that pew in the church, every details. This is what I love, ...

Chapter One My alarm went off, disturbing the silence that was surrounding me. I got up slowly, stretching every muscle in my body. I got dressed without a hesitation, having ...

Hey! I really like the plot line, i think it's a interesting story. The only thing that bothered me is the pace, it's a little bit slow going, but I ...