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Hi there! :) This is VERY long. Too long... I would suggest you separate it in chapters, maybe? Because when I look at that, I'm kind of on the verge ...

Hi there. :) This poem is not as bad as you think it is. I liked it. Yes, we've seen it all already, but I can't lie, it was good. ...

Hello there. :) I really liked the poem. The internal conflict was good. Even thought I do see how people could misinterpret it and think there's too people. "Just take ...

Hey there. :) I don't know what to say when Pink, already says it all... I'll just give out my opinion about the plot, and sorry in advance if I'm ...

Hi there, BlueAfrica That was good. I liked it. Yes it's depressing, but honestly, what isn't depressing when you're a teenager? I loved the way you wrote it. The emotions ...

Hi there. :) First off, you wrote the title wrong. Je t'aime, is the right way to write it. Believe me, you're talking to a frenchie here. :) "Je ’ ...

Hello, :) Well, this isn't as bad as you think it is! Serioulsy, i think this is good. There's always the shading issue... But this is a doodle, and normally ...

Hi there. :) I couldn’t help but feel that it was a sad day, not something worth celebrating at all. Putting his hands inside his jeans he leaned over the ...

Hi there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with the overall impression. Breathing heavily , Selene Day peered around at the corner of the dark forest. ...

Hi there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with the overall impression. As soon as I pass the Biology lab, a girl in my one of ...

Hello there. I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with the overall impression. He shoved me away and [color=#FF0000], [/color] mutter ing , “Sorry,” and ran up the ...

Okay, first, I would like to clear some things up. Since it's for English, I had to write a story from 2 to 4 pages, and believe me this is ...

This is a short story I wrote for English class. I need to present it on Monday the 27th of September, so please review! I need to know what you ...

Hello everyone! I'm not sure I should be putting these up, because it's been a while since I touched a few of them and now that they are in front ...

Hello Pink! So one more chapter... It was great by the way. I have to agree with Truth here. You have to have these "boring" spots (not really boring where ...