theotherone

Hello there. :) For the nitpicks... Well it's a poem so it's pretty hard to do that sort of thing, but I'm just going to give my opinion. Did you ...

Hello there. :) First off, what kind of course is it? Because if it's more like a cartoon, manga style, then you are just on the right path, and you'll ...

Hello there. :) First off, like you said, there's a lot of mistakes. Either you pass through it and correct them, or you can PM me if you want me ...

If you are wondering what this is about and want more information, check out the spoiler! Hope it helps a little bit. And now, tear it too piece. :) This ...

Hi there. :) This is really short. A paragraph is normally not enough to call it a chapter. I hope this is just the first part of the chapter and ...

Hi there. :) First off, I don't think I saw many grammatical mistakes, so congrats for that. I agree with Zoomie, about the broken mirror, and maybe with the parent's ...

Hello there. :) Whoa, are you sure you're new? Because this sure doesn't seem like it. I really like it. You seem able to catch the essence of things and ...

Hi there. :) First off, I realized your lines are a little bit rough. You seem to be working on them, when really you should be drawing the shadows and ...

Hi there. :) I think everyone already said all the nitpicks I could think of, so there's not really much to say on this end... Apart from that, the story ...

Okay, you just have to "submit your work" and post it, when your finished, it will automatically send you to the post, right? At the top, where it normally says ...

Hi there, :) First off, I think Hibiscus, here, pretty much said it all. The flow... It really needs work. I believe that there's pauses there that don't need to ...

Hello again. :) We reached the public park that was situated halfway between the between the conservatory and the main station. Like always, this is close to spotless. Now with ...

Hello there. :) We went outside and walked in silence for a while. Outside is one word. “Would it help you if I, say, took your hand? So you could ...

Hi there. :) The most richest man in the world? The most is not needed here. Richest is more than enough for us to understand. Wait …work for him? Wait ...

Hello there. :) First off with the nitpicks. Everyone pretty much said them all, and I won't repeat those. What else should I do? He was pulling my arm These ...