theotherone

Rated 18+ for the subjects (Drugs, alcohol and swearing). If you don't like that I'm writing about that, then don't read it. :) I woke up with a weird feeling ...

Hello there. :) It's quiet a chapter you've got here. It seems like a good introduction. Is it going to change perspective from chapter to chapter? Or it's going to ...

Hello there. :) First off, this seems to me as a child, and I wouldn't consider it as a adult. The big eyes, for one and then the little strand ...

Hello there. :) The woman was short and thin with brown curls framing her face. She wore a bright red coat, greatly contrasting the dark black of her partner’s. He ...

Hello there. :) I'm not going to do tons of nitpicking since people before me already did the most of it. “Morning, lovely. What are you drawing?” he shrugged off ...

Hello Verbena! Welcome to YWS, in a sense. ;) It's a wonder how you did to keep away from this site for such a long time. I'm looking forward to ...

Hello there. :) like she was looking for someone and did not find them. I think this flows better. “I’m dreaming, and I can’t wake up. This is the only ...

Hello there. :) Really good poem. :) Sorry for not meeting you on point; I always did meet you halfway. These lines are my favorite. I don't think I found ...

Hello there. :) For younger knights and sergeants such as Godfrey comma gazing out over the barren desert was enough to terrify them. As he rode on comma his stream ...

I suck at poetry and passing a message through it. I gave up on that a long time ago, and I'm aware this is not better, but I still wanted ...

Hello there. :) I'll start with the nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression of your story. When she did comma her heart started to race and she ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin my review with the nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression. You put black roses there for me, the same kind you always ...

Chapter One, two and three are done. :) Anyone else?

Hello, I'm here again for one last review! It was a relief when the doors opened and the scarf became looser around my neck. It's still first person POV. I ...

Hello there. :) After spending yet another weekend moping around the flat comma pondering about my newfound single life, my parents finally snapped. We planned to meet after work tomorrow, ...