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Hello there. :) Like Gracie said, there's not really a plot in there. A conflict between them, or even a internal conflict in the MC... It's just like rambling about ...

Hello Tayler! I would like a review from you. It's a romantic short story. :) Here's the link: Thanks in advance. And I would love to give you a feed ...

Hello there. :) Damn I had jam on toast , I thought. Thoughts should be in italics. “You’ll see,” she said, cocking her head in the direction of my office. ...

Rated because of the slight use of swear words. Can’t you just choose between me and him? Those words kept echoing in my head, and every time, I had an ...

Hello there. :) First off, I want to say that these picture are really good. First one is good, obviously. ;) I'm not too keen on the colors though, since ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks. Corrections are in red, and comments are in bold. Something in red AND bold means there's no correction, but there's a comment ...

Hello there. :) Any way , he was around that day. Did you mean Anyway? I liked this short story. It was short and really sweet. I don't think it ...

Hello there. :) A half-selfish desire, mayhap , but a desire to make her happy, nonetheless. Is this supposed to be maybe ? Or perhaps ? For the following minutes ...

Hello there. :) She nervously smiled, and my palms were sweating , not sure about what I was going to say next. This is a little bit awkward. It might ...

Hello there. :) I'm not going to do nitpicking on this, since Thien already did most of it. Plot wise, it missing something. It's way too short and we need ...

Hello there. :) I don't pretend I’m not still holding onto the memory of you. The phrasing was off in this sentence... I'm not sure how to rephrase it though. ...

Hello there. :) I won't do anything that's concerning grammar since Truth and Thien already did most of it. I would only be repeating and that wouldn't help, would it? ...

Hello there. :) Wow, this story was good. There's just enough romance with a hint of reality. There isn't much of development in the guy's character, but I don't think ...

Hello there. :) her vibrant red hair laid straight across her shoulders and her crystal clear blue eyes shined in the hallway lights. Straightly isn't a word... I think. ;) ...

Hello there. :) Like Penguin said before, your rhyming is inconsistent.You do for the first two stanzas and then you don't. I know you said you like rhymes that aren't ...