theotherone

Hello there. :) First things first: RE-SIZE! It'll be a lot better if you can see all the picture at once instead of scrolling down to do it... 1- I ...

Hello Scarlet. :) Am I ever going to be perfect yet? Get rid of the quotation marks and the period and just put it in italics to show it's a ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression of your story. "You think that will do anything? That it will change your situation? ...

Hello Alpha. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression on your story. She brushed her hair away, the sweat on her face making ...

Hello there. :) I like the second one as well, but I'm unsure about the font... Maybe it's just that it's not at the right place, or just that it's ...

Hello Sammay. :) I woke up but kept my eyes closed. Something was poking my arms and I could feel a thin blanket covering my body. I was wearing a ...

Hello there, :) I'm going to quote the whole thing so it's easier to correct. "Helga!" I screamed. "Look, Selena, we can get it ourselves comma, " My friend, Anna ...

Hello Lydia. :) “Oh, well, I would say about twelve pounds and sixpence for this beauty. I wouldn’t mind her myself but I already have plenty of...Toys,” he smirked at ...

Hello Graceful, welcome! So Tanya and Drama pretty much covered it all for the help and such... You'll get the hang of it soon, and once you do, it's going ...

Hello Julia! *waves back* Hope you've had time to search a little bit around the site. It's pretty easy to figure out, you'll see. :) If you ever need help, ...

Hello there. :) Sometimes I forgot to leave the rooms; l ike today. Like didn't need a capital letter. I clipped the hair out of my face, and once I ...

Hello there. :) I've known him for years. He's one of my closest friends, but not yet to the point of he being like my brother. I think. People sometimes ...

Hello there. :) I just.. didn't want to live. Also I had extreme anger issues that got really hard to deal with sometimes. I still had holes in my walls ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with nitpicks and then go on with overall impression on your story. "Hey buddy comma, " His dad said. Normally when someone writes something that ...

Hello there. :) I hated the long nosed and hairy faced secretary, and her hideous round glasses. Did you mean long nosed instead of long noised? "My dreams are the ...