theotherone

Hello there. :) First off, I want to say that it's not very encouraging when you see that all those people corrected your chapter, and you haven't even done the ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression on your story. He got in the passenger seat, his mom already waiting in ...

Hello again. :) " Whatcha' doin?" I think you forgot an 'h', but I'm not sure if you meant to write it that way. This was a cute chapter, and ...

Hello Drama. :) I'm going to begin with nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression on the plot. "Why comma, oh why did I agree you could move ...

Hello there. :) My eyes flickered open and I stared at the gray ceiling, waiting for Dad's reply The last thing I needed is to have been date-raped period. The ...

Hey Wicked! Welcome back! :) Hope we'll see you around. I noticed your from Canada... Canada rocks! Just saying. ;) -Other One

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on my overall impression on your story. The perfect two , he thought silently. This part should be in ...

Hello Alabaster. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression of your story. As I sit on the coast of the stone cold ocean, ...

Hello there. :) These are both beautiful. I have a thing for black and white, and I'm truly obsessed with it, but somehow, the one you took is not my ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression of your story. The sound seemed to echo through the long hall alerting everyone in ...

Hello Haylie. :) I loved it, but I couldn't stay there anymore, not with my family not being able to understand me and not trusting me with anything I said ...

Hello there. :) 1- This is good, but I think that the roof in the bottom left corner is a little bit distracting. You should probably crop the bottom part ...

Hello there. :) Wow, this is really beautiful. I love how you've captured his eye. and the colors are just great. His nose is just so cute! ;) I have ...

Hello there. :) So this is pretty good! You actually have a pretty good base, and it looks a lot like the picture. Like Story Weaver said before me, you ...

Hello there. :) I like this drawing, and I think you did pretty good. The only thing that bothers me is that it's pretty much all done with distinct lines. ...