thehobbitgangster

I agree with Snoink about the one verse that talked about the past. Perhaps you could instead incorporate the future? How, it would be so much better. Anyways, I loved ...

Hola! So, I thought this poem definitely fit the title you chose. My one issue with it is that is gets a little "who am I" like in a riddle. ...

teeth

I agree that this poem should be expanded upon. It felt like there was a whole adventure just waiting to happen. The line that begins "as every star in the ...

The fortune cookie one was my favorite out of the two. I agree that the rainbow doesn't look natural enough. My advice would be to either make it even more ...

star

I haven't heard of the songs, but I do like Queen and so I give you a 8/10 Somewhere over the Rainbow - Israel Kamakawiwo'ole Empire State of Mind - ...

Hola! So I'm feeling a country vibe sort of for this song. I don't know if it was the subject matter or the way some of the words rhymes or ...

You know you are a nerd when you accidentally misplace your graphing calculator (with tons of programs on it) and feel like your life is over...

paint

And so here I am, sitting at my desk the next day, the phone practically staring me down. Well, I did tell Gosling I would call him I think, and ...

I look like an old woman, I thought as I peered in the mirror. Leaning further over the sink I looked closer into the glass. Maybe the fluorescent lights in ...

grit

Hey, this was pretty good. It had a very good rhyme scheme for a while, but sort of fell apart in the second verse. Also some of the rhymes were ...

Hey, thanks for the comments! I attempted to fix the punctuation problem and I think it's pretty much solved. So, hopefully that will end the whole run-in problems! And I ...