thehobbitgangster

Paradise

Hello there! So, the way the lines are so short I can almost see this as a rap with the chorus being sung, but that's just the way I interpreted ...

Fortunately, the capybaras could not detonate the bomb as they had no opposable thumbs.

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Hey! So, just a few things. The line "I'm been trying to breath, but I'm fighting for air" should be "I'm trying to breathE, but I'm fighting for air". The ...

Dawn rose above the city of Avirkian, and with it climbed pillars of smoke and steam floating from chimneys and pipes protruding from the various rooftops. The sky began to ...

Dawn rose above the city of Avirkian and with it climbed pillars of smoke and steam floating from chimneys and pipes protruding from the various rooftops. The sky began to ...

Hey! I'd like to also welcome you to YWS! Swimming is my favorite sport too. It's not much of a spectator sport, but it's awesome anyways. Good luck with all ...

Granted, but now you also are constantly notified where everybody else on this site got their Avvies from causing you to have to sift through lots of spam. I wish ...

These were sweet lyrics with a really cute message, but weren't overly sappy or anything like that. The formatting was perfect and I really liked how you introduced two separate ...

Hey would you please review this? It's a prologue to a story I'v been working on. It's sort of action adventure/somewhat sci-fi Thank you!

Firstly, is this a poem or lyrics? It doesn't show typical song stuff (chorus, bridge, verse, etc.) besides having verses. Other than that, it keeps a consistent rhyme scheme, although ...

Prologue: Inside the Captain’s quarters there was a calm. Away from the hustle and bustle of his crew, the Captain could think here, like it was his sanctuary. Filled with ...

I always thought that one day nice people will have enough and go crazy.

Hey! This was a really fantastic parody! I love this song and I think that the concept went with it very well. Any who, a couple of things... The line ...