thedelphinater

Awesomeness!!! Anyway, so far as mechanics go: Unfeeling and unconscious To current’s tug and God’s call, Floating in and around myself, I rise, but maybe I fall? I don't think ...

This was good. A few little things however. Firstly, the beginning of each line needs to be capitalized. Secondly, you need more punctuation. You have some, but it needs a ...

Thanks to everyone for your comments. I fixed the punctuation and stuff, and I kept part of the note at the beginning to give people a sort of feel for ...

Oh the irony, I wrote this after I got over the guy I liked. Weird. Anyway, if anyone's familiar with Lemon Demon, it's in that sort of style, goofy and ...

Well, I'm probably not the best person to be reviewing this partially because I can't relate, but mostly because I hate romance and all that sappiness. This wasn't bad, I ...

Pretty good, except for a few little errors: If you feel rite I make you the light! "Rite" is supposed to be spelt "right." Rite is more in the sense ...

Well, you know, compared to say, I don't know, 1984 by Orwell, or Slaughter-House Five by Vonnegut, Stargirl seems a bit... childish? I mean, great message and all, but, not ...

Not bad, but it needs some work. Like you said, the stanzas and flow need some work. Some of the phrasing and words choices were a bit awkward, so it ...

I thought this was really good, not just from a grammar/spelling/punctuation standpoint, but just the poem itself. Like, I can't put my finger on it, but I just really, really ...

Yay! Death Cab for Cutie! Sorry, they're one of my favorite bands, so I envy you for being able to see them live. Moving on to your writing, good job! ...

Well, you sort of get it. You get the first part, the anger, the frustration, the resentment. What you don't get is the having to hold it back, because everyone ...

This was pretty good. I liked the plot so far, and I think I understand what's going on. A few little things I noticed though. So far as grammar goes,it ...

This was really good. Not only was the idea good, but so was the imagery, rhythm, spelling, structure, and grammar for the most parts. In one or two places you ...

I'm generally not one to really like rap and that sort of stuff, but I really liked this. Not only was it well written, but the message was awesome, and ...

No fair! How come you get to be so good at writing without even trying? Rawr! Ahem, sorry about that, though it was sincere and I hope it made you ...