thedelphinater

Hi! You're new here, so I'll try to be fairly normal and not scare you away! :P Heat raining down fromt the sun as it lights up the sky. This ...

Hi! You're a new member, so I'll try to seem fairly normal and not scare you away. :P What were you before you came to me? Were you the treasure ...

This was good. The only other two things I noticed were the rhyme scheme and punctuation. You had punctuation, but it was very boring. Every. Line. Ended. In. A. Period. ...

I liked this, and yet I kind of didn't. I'm trying to think how to explain this without sounding mean or anything. See, I can relate, and these are often ...

This was good. I liked the imagery, and I couldn't find anything that was really wrong with it. Just two little things I noticed: And the stars loving gaze. Should ...

This was good and made me feel, well, happy. Sometimes you just need to remind yourself that even though things are tough at the moment, life isn't all that bad. ...

Hmm, I'm not really sure how I feel about this one. I get what you're saying, and to some level I agree with it. I agree with you in the ...

Oh I really liked this and can totally relate. I don't have glasses, but I'm basically one of those people that isn't even on the social pyramid, much less on ...

This was good. Just a few little things though. The poem starts out really strong, and then it sort of starts to not exactly fall apart, that sounds to dramatic ...

Wow. This was amazing. I'm not very good at critiquing, but I honestly could not find any major flaws. The flow was perfect, as well as all that other grammar/punctuation ...

Hi! You're so lucky for two reasons. First of all, you live in Russia, which is so cool. I've seen pictures of Yekaterinburg, and it is really pretty. And secondly, ...

Um, I'm not quite sure what to say about this, other than I think it's in the wrong section. I wouldn't exactly consider it poetry for lack of basically any ...

Ooh I really liked this, too! I can't do very much of a critique, because there wasn't very much I found wrong, and Evi already said most of the things ...

Aw, this was sad, now I'm depressed. Though I did like the redeeming ending. Like, yeah Fia died, but her sister loved her enough tot let her go. Now, time ...

First order of business: the nit-picking stuff. OK, so it started out pretty good, but then you sort of seemed to lose interest or something in grammar and punctuation and ...