thedelphinater

Not bad. Really short though, rather pointless in a way. I mean, they get in a car crash, she's embarrassed. The end. Um, OK, now what? I would suggest combining ...

Wow. What is up with everyone and such sappy, depressing poetry? Anyway, not bad. There where a little too many commas in the middle, but I'll let Elkiza do most ...

Thanks guys. Love you too.

Just one little thing I saw: “You couldn’t pick up the pace?” I snapped in irritation. I was rarely ever in a bad mood, but it was different when things ...

I loved this, mostly because I can sooooo relate! “Mom, no one is going to see my bra, so can we just stick to plain ones?” I have that argument ...

I don't know why you thought this was so poorly written. I'm not sure if it was the best chapter so far, but it was a good way to reveal ...

Awesome job! I don't generally like romance and all that jazz, but I'm actually like this. A few little things though. I think a few were already said, so I ...

Hey guys! Anyway, from what I last read, you changed the end. You just totally scratching the part you showed me, or adding it on later? Anyway, *gasp!* the grammar ...

Yay! First real review! Anyway, pretty good. One thing though, what was with the whole Iris thing? I mean, I know she's a pretty important character, but to me it ...

Feel even more special, because I kept reading!!! I couldn't find anything that wasn't already said. Twas chuckling to myself the entire time, I mean, deep revelations about deep revelations. ...

Feel special Eliza, I've finally read your work. I must say, I really like it. I loved the little dream sequence thing, certainly different from the norm. In most novels, ...

Not a bad concept. I mean, I like a good zombie story as much as the next. Definitely needs some work though. LOTS of run-on sentences. I can't possibly point ...

This. Poem. Was. Awesome!!! I loved, loved, loved it!!! Great imagery and rhythm! A few things though: I think you were going for a rhyme scheme, and for the most ...

So far so good! I loved the imagery and all the details. I also liked how the first part of this was almost from the point of view of the ...

I agree: everyone loves food, and your friends are awesome *winkwink*. I disagree: Taylor Swift is not awesome, and why does everyone love the color purple!?! Miscellaneous comments: Yay!!! You ...