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Re: Vasir, a new member.
*makes mental note of "Wizards first rule"* Cool, I like fantasy, so I'll definitely check it out. And yes, you can call me Delph by the way. :)
Aug 10, 2009 -
Re: Me and the Moon
This was very good. I liked the descriptions and the emotion in it. I understood the family, as well as what Alex was going through. Two complaints though: Both she ...
Aug 10, 2009 -
Re: Vasir, a new member.
Hiya Vasir! First name's The, last name's Delphinater. :) Anyway, you're in luck, as this site has a surplus of awesome people, though it is unfortunate that it'll be down ...
Aug 10, 2009 -
Re: Fetus (1)
This was good. Most of what I noticed so far as nit-picks go was already said. My only complaint would be when it goes from the past to the present, ...
Aug 10, 2009 -
Re: Forgetful.
This was good. I thought it was more of a short story than a script, though, since there weren't any sort of stage directions, and it was told from the ...
Aug 10, 2009 -
Re: Full Eclipse
This was good, especially for your first try at poetry. I thought you relayed the message fairly clearly, though I might have used a bit more imagery, which is hard ...
Aug 10, 2009 -
Re: Long Shot {1}
This was very good. I couldn't find anything that I would fix, and I thought that this was a good first chapter. You introduced the reader to the narrator's life ...
Aug 10, 2009 -
Re: Novel Idea, HELP!
It sounds pretty good so far. Kind of 1984-esque. I like Amon360's idea, though I might make the Agency a bit more flawed and evil. If there are leaders and ...
Aug 10, 2009 -
Re: Kiss the Rain
This was good. Only two things I noticed were that each stanza should be the same length and that the beginning of every line should be capitalized. Other than that, ...
Aug 8, 2009 -
Re: Hysteria
This is good, but needs a little work. First thing I noticed was the rhythm/flow. The poem seemed very choppy to me, and I couldn't really figure out what the ...
Aug 8, 2009 -
Re: Rate the Avatar Above You! [3]
A bit cliche, but I do have a weakness for anything pink... 9/10
Aug 8, 2009 -
Re: The User Below You ... [2]
Well, the person above me didn't say a fact, so I'll just be positive and say yes! TUBM is obsessed with Neil Cicierega (oh wait, that's just me :P).
Aug 5, 2009 -
Re: A random fact about yourself
I own (and can play) five different instruments. Eight if you include a recorder, kazoo, and harmonica. And I'm also crazy enough to want several other instruments, mainly keytar and ...
Aug 5, 2009 -
Re: Worst Book You've Ever Read
I must say, I'm rather shocked about some of the books people hate (Slaughter-House Five, To Kill a Mockingbird, His Dark Materials, Animal Farm, Lord of the Flies). And then ...
Aug 3, 2009 -
Re: Paper Dolls
OK seriously, you're poetry is really taking a toll on my self-esteem. Can't you make a mistake just once? Something other than just one line not being capitalized at the ...
Jul 27, 2009
