theconstructed

Tamia looked up at the stranger sitting across from her, lips determinedly pressed together. Maybe this instead? Tamia looked up at the stranger sitting across from her; her lips determinedly ...

Kay, I just figured out how to go read the rest of it. So forget most of what I just said haha.

I think it's fairly good. I'd like to read more, maybe start the story from the beginning or something. How long is it? What is Elyn? He's short and has ...

I like your words. They're so beautifully sad.