theboss

Ok, thanks for all the feedback! @FloralTiara I spaced up the conversations a bit, is this how it should be? And yea, I actually discovered the existence of the movie ...

Thanks, the prologue was just something I whipped up fast to make it all have a more story-teller-is feeling. I'll try to rewrite the whole thing in the "show" not ...

Thanks for the crit's all. :D I really got some useful tips here. I added a prologue and tweaked the story a bit, so if anyone would care to take ...

**Not finished. Terribly sorry for the inconvenience but i've updated it just now. :? Mostly the stuff that Ultra pointed out so it shouldn't pose such a problem though.

Than you should add something about him changing, like "The boy rose up into the sky, levitating my an unknown force. Surrounded by light from an unknown origin, growing brighter ...