thatoddkid

For a story based off a prompt, this was good. Really good. But it's always hard to give prompted stories substance, and that's where you fall a bit short. The ...

I kind of feel bad because I'm a person that speaks fluent sarcasm, and I enjoyed this very much. I can't tell you how many times I've used the phrase ...

I knew I was going to love this as soon as I read Leslie's first line. I suppose the only thing to comment on here is your use of dialogue ...

So because I don't usually like (read: almost always hate) poetry, and because today is a very unusual day, I'll go ahead and review this. Many people are commenting on ...

First of all, it seems to me as though saying something on this site is cliché is, in itself, cliché. As long as you wrote it well, whether or not ...

The first thing I have to comment on is your wonderful use of setting. Too many times, our stories are set in places like a kitchen, a car, etc. We're ...

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It's the heart in this that makes it. You could rewrite it a hundred times... it wouldn't matter. You got your message across with some very passionate, emotional language... Wow. ...

I don't think I've ever felt more pain from any other story. Your skill at showing emotion is amazing. The hate, the sadness - not only do I sympathize with ...

Whoa - do I know you? One of my close friends expressed this to me in practically the same words. Or maybe it's just a universal thought, just a place ...

I can't tell you how many times I've felt that exact same desperation - but I can say that you captured it perfectly. In a very humorous way, to top ...

I had no idea the words "I hate you" could ever be so sweet. Nice job taking comedy from tension. I like how you didn't make the love too dramatic; ...

David Foster Wallace, anyone? No? Anyway, I love the style. I say keep the run-ons - after all, if one of the most influential writers of the twenty-first century had ...

Lizzie sounds exactly like one of my best friends... I don't know if that added to the reality of the story, but it certainly helped. You have a certain wit ...