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Hi, Wicked. I have noticed that your other reviewers have mentioned this too, you need to put commas in where they are needed. There were a few other grammatical mistakes, ...

The sun was setting; casting long shadows over the baren landscape. Temperatures at night often came below freezing, and despite their thick clothing, the Shadine could not survive in such ...

well, i noticed that you said you wanted to have this novel published and, good news: as far as i can see, this steps up to the mark. i think ...

The streaming sound as the speeding arrow head breaks the wind. The thud as the target circle brings it to an end. The target had been reached, the spongy, red ...

erm, ok spiderman. the poem was good and it gave off a good message, i've got to sya though that the syllables were all over the place, i know you ...

hi, i really liked this prologue and i'm sure this will turn into an interesting story. one of my main concerns though is making sure you don't always tell the ...

wow, that really was a good piece of poetry. i liked the fact that you put loads of description into the work, and that really helped to enthisise the effect ...

hi megg, welcome to YWS. i'll be your reviewer today. well first off, i would say: do not use so much of the word 'fun' in the poem, i know ...

o.k, alot of people will read this and wonder what it's all about. i think people who really like poetry will understand though. I start my journey home, Walking past ...

I wait alone injured as I’m left here to die Watching bombs and explosions as time flies by. No one will help, no one has time. So I’ll soon lift ...

The brown of the wings traverse the blue sky. But no one can see as our Griffin flies by. Yellow beak pointing direction, Creature of beauty, of mortal affection. Tail ...

She stares longingly from behind the crystal glass, Enviously watching the children playing whilst their parents water the garden in the heat of the long summer sun. The pink wall ...

hi. a really good poem. a really good story to go with it. straight away the reader is drawn in by the title you have chosen, and you executed the ...

wow, this really was a good write. you used some exellent imagery and some really good words to describe what was happening. good use of the title. it somes up ...

Hi! not a bad poem, but not an amazing one either. the piece was missing something. like another reviewer said, it needed something to make it more interesting and not ...