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Hi, Gheala. I'm here to review. Unfortunately, I've never been that good at reviewing, so I'll do my best - since it's you :-) I loved it! I've got to ...

Okrol woke in an unfamiliar bed; scratchy sheets and moth eaten blankets were firmly tucked around him. Bandages lay tenth-fold around his sore head. Okrol dared to open his eyes. ...

Okrol drousily woke not opening his eyes, the back of his head was sore. His surroundings were warm especially the back of his head. He lay still for a minute, ...

I can't say I don't. TPBM loves the Beatles and all of that 60s stuff.

I really don't want to completely repeat what the other reviewers have just said but I actually might :/. I think the prologue is very interesting, but you unfortunately use ...

if you enjoy reading this, here's an overture I composed for the story: Above the high peaks of Greygoff Valley, the sun silently descended, exhaling it's red miasma before drifting ...

I originally wrote this and called it A Veil of Clouds. I have gone over it and have taken the advice given into consideration and have come up with this, ...

I really, really liked this one. Even though there's not that much imagery, I was fully immersed in the scene. I think this one appeals to nearly everybody because nearly ...

I actually really like this piece; sure you could have done with a better Syllable count on each line and in some parts the rhyming was a bit off but ...

In my dream I walk along the yellow beach of humanity. Each grain of sand is a thought from the people of the world. Some stay and are kept forever. ...

That really is a great story. I was trying to work out what it was and then saw the review. That's actually really quite clever, its like a riddle.

Even me, who doesn't play cards too much could tell what this was about. This was about a girl, and you were rejected. I could seriously relate to this story ...

I've first got to say that I was quite pleasantly surprised by the story behind "The Tree". The whole idea was great and the metaphor you used was genius. As ...

really, really liked this. The flow was excellent and as i was reading the first few lines, i think i came across some rhyming too; but that might just be ...

England, oh my England. Your rolling hills and vales. England, oh my England. Your wonderful rainy gales. Your beauty always brimming a glass that is half full. London, Leeds and ...