thanatosdeath

Heh, I really liked this. All about the twist and turns of life. Up and down, forward and back...*Sigh*...This was well written and I don't think I got puntual error, ...

Sorry, I forgot to read the note above, so I posted before I read it... :shock: Silly me, alright, lining needs work...But it does add drama...It's actually quite good now ...

was good, but I didn't quite grasp what you're getting at...Terror? Sadness? What? PM when it's more understandable maybe? Death

Great tale, and rhyming! I must say I'm impressed, maybe you'll make it big time in the big leagues of the world! Death

Yay! More negativity for me to fee on! Erm, not that that's a bad thing...*sweat drop*...I loved the message you sent out...A big thing I got out of this was ...

I'm definitly agreeing with the others...Move it...Heh, sorry I'm comin' on to strong aren't I?...But it's most interesting...I liked it...A lot... :D Death

Sad...Not that that's a bad thing! Ilike negativity and such things like this...*Sigh*...Now you have much puntuation errors so you'll need to work on that...But I like your approach at ...

I see you're trying different ideas...That's good, I like the other version better offense...So...Like always work hard and you achieve great things... Chat later! Death

Grrrr. Stop rushing , Girl!!! Concentrate on one thing fist then move on! Make sure everyhting fits too!!! Don't keep posting random things! Remember to work hard, and check it! ...

I really think you need to workon this! HOnestly we don't want you copying others !!! Sounds like you're using the Disney Hades and stuff..You know...Vortex of Fire? Work! Don't ...

I must say...This was...Interesting...How to put this...Definitly needs work, but in all do time it shall blossom...Spelling errors, punctuation...The plots good...We should work together...I think I

Spelling in some places need work, that or wording...I liked how you described things and such...Overall: Awesome! Still needs work though... Heh, I like silver and spiders... Death

*Is agreeing with everyone else*...Don't get me wrong, poem idea: great...The way you put it...Culd use some work...Overall: good Death

Great play of words, could be spaced though (just my opinion), I couldn't read very clearly...Overall it was good... Great desciption too! Death

Punctuation is a little messy, but this was well put...Erm...Repittion usually doesn't fit, but it worked for this piece... Death