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Vi: I was being escorted down the hallway. My guard wasn't really alert. We turned a corner and I saw a boy around eighteen standing, staring at something I couldn't ...

This was a very original piece I liked that you could interpret the piece in different ways; siding with the man or against him. I also thought it was nice ...

Really creative poem, i think I liked the word choice in it the most, really some interesting ones in there! Also I enjoyed the style of it with actual dialogue ...

You should probably break the first line into to lines for better flow of the piece and maybe instean of black, white, and gray you could put monotones, or monochromatic. ...

My favorite line is Stare into the mirror and wonder what I'd look like if I were a cartoon character. It was a nice, light, funny poem that wasn't too ...

Good job, usually new members have tons of grammatical and spelling errors, but I didn't see any in this. Welcome to YWS. Good luck! :)

WOW! I love it! Is Lucy real? Don't answer that. There were some grammatical errors that you should probably fix. I once read that a way to edit your work ...

I love it. I agree, the last paragraph was the most awesome.

You spelled prologue wrong in the first sentence. And now you've got me spelling it wrong, I had to retype it like four times. I feel like this could easily ...

I like it too. Maybe, I'd find a different word instead of neat. But that's my opinion.

I'm having trouble thinking of a name for this novel. Any suggestions would be helpful. Since I was eight, I've been hunted. I don't know why, or who, or how, ...

I've decided not to finish this. Does anyone know how I can delete this?

mother's picture, not mothers picture. she knew, not see knew. There should be period after He opened the door not a comma. There should be a comma between the voice ...

As dark as THE devil. In my opininon, there shouldn't be a comma after His skin so coarse. I like its message. Good imagery.

I like it, but maybe you shouldn't end two sentences at the end with it is.