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Hmmm... I can't think of anything at the moment, but maybe some of the members of Plot Bunny Adoption Agency can help you out. Good luck.

This is sooo sad. My heart ached, and I almost had tears in my eyes (I would have if it was longer.) Please PM me when you get the next ...

There's ALOT of grammer and spelling mistakes, and they were VERY distracting. You're sorta new, so I'll give you some slack, but please, in the future, edit before you post. ...

I think it's a little confusing, but that might be because I don't know that much about vampires. I don't think you should start the poem with "and". The way ...

Eve: I feel really bad for Arthur, but I don't get what that has to do with anything. "Umm..." I ask him, "Who's Anansi?"

I like it, though I feel it could be longer. Also, maybe you should break it into a couple of stanzas instead of just the one.

I like it and I'm not even in calculas yet! It's very philosophical. I think that you could change the title though because the title you have makes it seem ...

Jesus loves you, even when you disrespect Him like this. He died on a cross for you anyways.

"He's saying the game's begun in earnest," The Wolf-boy said. I shivered. All the other girls swooned. I rolled my eyes. I didn't get what they saw in him. His ...

I get it, and I like the poem a lot. I like how it goes with your avvie.

I feel like the line Her rose-blonde hair is in a bun, with white ribbon tied around the edge, should be broken into two lines.

I like the poem, but I don't think you should end two lines in a row with sleep. My favorite line was Threatening the moist air with a heat monster. ...

Here's a few more: Aaron=Aaden, Abram Seth=Stephan, Sven Logan=Landon

It was sad. I like that its simple. Poor Teddy Bear. I thought it had good flow. I think you should make the title shorter, maybe just call it Teddy ...

I like this poem, though I think it might be a little too short. Having said that, I do agree that that's part of its beauty, but maybe just a ...