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What do you think youR doing to me.

It started off a little slow, but I kept reading it because I like your voice. It's very fitting to the type of story you wrote, and I like that. ...

I don't think: Bloom again when springtime brinkings makes complete sense, I think Bloom again WITH springtime brinkings makes more sense. I really do like the poem, though. I like ...

For the boy who lived TWO houses over. Not tow houses over. I really like this poem. It's nostalgic and mysterious at the same time. I think you could work ...

Wow. This is sooo sad. A little too sad for my taste. But some people like that. It's very dramatic.

I'm not sure unable makes grammatic sense, the way you used it, but other than that, I liked the poem.

I like your voice and imagery. I think you should break it up into more than one stanza. It's a good poem and I like it. I think you could ...

Eve: We were nearing the hotel, but we hadn't really talked about a plan at all. Everyone had been pretty quiet, they were all scared and dwelling on their own ...

I kinda like math (because I'm good at it), but I liked this poem anyways. My only critic is that I think loath is spelled loathe. I'm not sure, though.

We get a couple canned fruit and some bottles of water, but don't take that much. For some reason, the fact that they are allowing us to take the food ...

Cute

Eve: "Hey," Storm says. "Hi," I say, "do you know me?" She looks at me funny. "I lost my memory about a month ago," I explain. She shakes her head. ...

Eve: Rain tells us to plan on the way. Well, she doesn't really tells us, she bends it. It's the weirdest thing I've ever seen.

Storm says I was wrapping them too tight. I wasn't. I know what she's talking about. I can't remember the name either, but that happened to me once with the ...

Eve: Arthur has been caught. Stupid, stupid Arthur! Why'd he go out there alone! "We have to save him, don't we?" but I know the answer, even as I ask ...