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*Gasp!* No! This is a really good story because, even though it''s so short, you really capture what's going on and draw in the readers and get them to know ...

Vi: I have no idea how I made the water, but I did. I knew it was futile, but I made it anyway. Wolf knocks Leo off his feet and ...

I like the last line. I think you should break it up into stanzas, to make it more readable. Some of it was confusing, but most of it was good. ...

I didn't really understand some of it at the end but that's probablly because this is the first I've read of this story found a few mistakes; 'taking my feet ...

Wow interesting story. This really reminds me of a book I read called; North of Beautiful, by Justina Chen Headley. It's also about a girl with a birthmark on her ...

The very first time you say "Breath" I think you mean Breathe, and I think that would work better. Also "minuscule strides" is an oximoron I believe, so there's not ...

This is my first comment on a picture. I really like this picture for some reason! Did you actually get that close to the horse, or was that zooming in? ...

I agree with the person who said "It's bumming me out but it's Beautiful!" I can really feel the emotion in it, and I can completely relate to all that ...

I think this poem needs some work.. in some parts I'm getting what you're saying but in others I'm completely lost to be honest. The poem is very "in your ...

The first sentence is kind of does not make sense, it seems contradictory. Her thoughts seem a little bit short and choppy. I like how the stranger talks it gives ...

It's really a dark poem, a little too dark for me. The title I don't really understand, and it seems long for such a short poem. There should not be ...

Interesting story! Very original deffinantly. I really liked the character of the green-skinned serpant, I could picture her and kind of hear her. I would change the sentence that said ...

when you wrote: "She brought him into a maze of hallways," I don't think maze was the best word choice, since their last name is maze. In the same paragraph, ...

We wake up the next day, sore and stiff from being in the tree and sleeping on the ground. We scavenge for some berries. It's not a big breakfast, but ...

I think it is a good poem, though I think it could be longer. I love the line: Jump until you hit the sky. I feel that you could work ...