tgirly

I really liked this poem, but I feel the last stanza doesn't have as much flow as the other ones. Good job, though :) -tgirly

I agree with lockedlibrary, you have to write more! I have to know what happens next, and more about him/her! I think it could be a little clearer, since I ...

Apathetic Moron, That's what I thought of you. Slinking down the hall, with your baggy jeans, your shaggy hair, and your expressionless face. That was before I knew you. You'd ...

Three miles a day? Uggh. I think if you broke it into smaller lines, it would have better flow. I agree with paperback that at first it seems so serious, ...

EVE: I felt bad for what I'd said to Lidz. But I was too busy crying to think about it. From the bathroom, I heard a strang scream and, wiping ...

Full Name: Nathaniel Lewis Age (18 or under): 17 Appearance (Written and/or Picture): Dark hair, dark green eyes, olive toned skin Personality He's quiet, and has gotten away with things ...

Eve: I waited impatiently until I could rush to Arthur's side. He still had his eyes closed, but when I took his hand, he squeezed it. When his eyes finally ...

Eve: I stared through the doorway into the medicine room where Seshat was trying to bring Arthur back. Please be okay, please be okay, I thought. I hadn't felt this ...

I saw Drustan holding Storm and felt for a moment a sting in my chest. I pushed the emotion that caused the pain down. There was no time for the ...

Eve: "He's not here," Lidz said, "He's long gone, you missed him by ages." The man didn't believe her. The crowd of birds outside was getting bigger and bigger. Real ...

Vi: "What's the matter?" Storm asked me, "And don't say 'nothing' either. You're almost tearing up." I glanced at her. Really, we were a lot alike. She looked like she ...

Eve: I glanced out the window and saw a bird made out of fire. I pulled the humidity in the outside air into clumps that looked somewhat like birds. A ...

Eve: Rain and I had found some spare rooms and had slept until it was dark. When I woke up, I did a people check. Everyone's body water felt different, ...

Someone pinch me!

Name: Dmitri Half: bad. There was a mixup, and he was put in the good side, but about a year ago they realized they made a mistake because his other ...