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Also, if you could PM me when you finish the second chapter, that would be great.

It's pretty good, and I don't see any grammer mistakes. It definitely makes me want to read the next chapter. My only critic would be to break the first paragraph ...

I like two and five the best. My least favorite, is probably one, because it seems a little, I don't know, immature to me.... but that's just my opinion. My ...

I like two and five the best. My least favorite, is probably one, because it seems a little, I don't know, immature to me.... but that's just my opinion. My ...

I agree, I couldn't find the beat either, but I liked it a lot, and maybe you do have a melody for it. I also agree that it's a great ...

Eve: Rain crossed her arms. I didn't know if I could convince her, and we were wasting precious time arguing. "I'm going with you, Zina," I said. Lidz and Wolf ...

Eve: We were all stunned and scared by Zina's revelation. "How do you know?" Rain asks Zina, "How do we know this isn't a trap?" "And if it is?" I ...

I hear you give really good reviews, so I was wondering if you could review the first chapter of my novel, Hunted. Thanks! :)

Hunted ch. 1 please. Overall, and nitpicking. As nitpicky as you can get, but if there's something wrong with it as a whole, please tell me. Don't be too easy ...

Eve: I notice Zina drawing in the dirt and look to see what she's drawing. She's drawn a tree in the dirt. "Nice tree," I say. "Thanks," she replies. She ...

I think this is a great poem, and I really like it, but for some reason, I feel like the first two or three stanzas don't match the rest of ...

Changing the order a little bit. I glare out the window. Mitch glares ahead as she drives. Silas glares at me. Everyone's in a glaring mood. Well, actually, Mitch is ...

Vi: We're on the move again. Finally. I ignore Drustan and Storm. I have to focus if I'm going to get out of here. I was willing to admit defeat ...

I like this poem. I like how she knows that it's silly teenage drama, but got caught up in it anyway. It makes it feel more real. The lines are ...

Breath should be breathe. tryed should be tried. You used the wrong "to." You could probably go into a little more detail about how crushed she was, about him and ...