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I liked it a lot, and I will probably go on to read the next chapter. However, there were a few things wrong with it. First, there were a few ...

Vi: Xia declines. If Drustan or Storm offers, then I'll be stuck with the other one. "I'll go," I say. This place is driving me crazy. I could use some ...

"Three things will last forever--faith, hope, and love--and the greatest of these is love." -1 Corinthians 13:13. These are the three things that should matter to us more than anything, ...

Eve: I was scared of the fire, but the calm girl who had come and talked to me brushed it away. I went up to the boy who calls himself ...

I like it. It's really deep. I like the last line the best, "And I get the grand old feeling of surprise." It's like you did all this expecting so ...

I only found one grammer mistake, so kudos to you! In the last line, a should be an. Not that big of a deal, but it was slightly distracting. I ...

There are some slight grammatical poetic problems, like not capitalizing some beginning of lines, but capitalizing others. I couldn't really see a pattern with that, so you should probably go ...

We pull up to the police station. Alina's asleep by the time we get there and the rain is slowing down. Mitch carries Alina out, but before I can get ...

Eve: They're all so sad. I must have known them really well. I wanted to remember, truly I did, but I just couldn't. I looked around at everything. It was ...

(OOC: He's really going to let us go that easily?) Eve: I felt like I was in a cradle being rocked. It felt so peaceful, so quiet. I wanted to ...

I like it, it was inspiring. I feel like it really didn't have anything personal about it though, like it was just a list of the best quotes from a ...

Oooh! It's interesting. You should PM me when you've got more of it posted. It definitely peequed my interest. My only critique is that you do a lot of showing ...

Cling to me, I'll hurt for you. Live for me, I'll die for you. Laugh for me, I'll cry for you. Strive for me, I'll fight for you. Fly for ...

The sun is seeping through my eyelids. I groan. My shoulder is sore. Where am I? Then I remember Them, and the girl's face staring at me, and my eyes ...

Eve: The air seemed to stiffen as we got tenser and tenser, walking through the woods. Finally I saw Razi, and the first thing I felt was relief. And then ...