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I feel like the first stanza doesn't really have the same word choice as the rest. I feel there could be more unity. Other than that, I do like the ...

Luke 23 32 Two other men, both criminals, were also led out with him to be executed 33 When they came to the place called the Skull, there they crucified ...

I've never heard the original, but I like this a lot. I have a sweet tooth, and love the referances to candy. It's a very nice poem, I love it. ...

I like it. My favorite stanza is probably the last. It has a different flow than the other lines, but that's okay, because it adds more emphasis on it. I ...

I love it! My only critique is that I think you meant for "For Everything" in Creature's letter to be italicized like the rest of it. Other than that, there's ...

We reach Hardin. We stop at Dairy Queen, and everyone gets half a hamburger. We could afford more, but we want to save our money for lunch tomorrow. After that, ...

Agreed.

Eve: I gasped as he stuck his hand through the flame and it didn't burn. I hesitantly stuck my hand out to the flames like he had. I glanced at ...

Chance-Together: I stared up at the jet as it broadcasted Dad's voice. My knees were shaking. I didn't know what else to do, so I sat down on the thin ...

Changed my profile a little bit.

We were reading "Nothing Gold Can Stay" by Robert Frost, and it kinda reminded me of this poem in a good way. Just thought I'd tell you!

I think it would have more flow if you changed "Is where you can be found" to "Is where you'll be found." Also, I feel like in the fourth line, ...

I like it, it has a very real feeling that you don't find in many poems. I can really see your personality in your writing, which is a good thing. ...

We wait at the gas station for what feels like ages, then start looking for him. The sky darkens with thunder clouds, and by the time we find him, it's ...

Since it's Tuesday, can we start now?