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I like it. It definitely has intrigue. Maybe it's from reading chapter 2 and chapter 3, and then chapter 1, but I'm not sure if this chapter fits with the ...

Towards is one word, you have it as to wards. There were a few other grammar/spelling errors, but they all could be easily fixed by a quick once-over. Oscar kind ...

I don't think anyone would actually ever say to their brother, "You're an adult in you early twenties." Little too telly, not enough show. I wouldn't say that Joseph scampered. ...

I like your theme and the story behind the poem. Fix up your grammar mistakes and it'll be even better. It's an awesome poem, but could use a little less ...

It started a little slow and ended a little weird (see above comment from remember) but there was a little gold nugget in the middle, amidst all the grammar mistakes ...

Nice poem. I don't actually remember 911, 'cause I was three at the time, but I really like your poem, it changed the country forever. I think the structures of ...

LOL, love the little note at the bottom for us Americans! Your piece had humor and the start of conflict (love triangle!) And you definitely got into character. You put ...

Nice, I like it. We need more Christian fiction out there. Just two nitpicks: In you last sentence, there should be a comma before and after dear reader. I think ...

God gave you the gift of words. It was so moving, I could feel your faith in every word. I'm awestruck by the power of your testimony, I can't believe ...

"Tell us about when you saved us," Aya asks that night. The twins had been silent or crying all day, but Aya seemed to have gotten her composure back after ...

Chance: Togethers: I barely noticed the girl sit down. As she stands up, I'm broken from my trance. She walks away. I glance after her. I stand up. The fire's ...

Dmitri: I woke up from my little nap and glanced out a window to see if the wolf was still there. Yep. I decided to start looking for another door ...

I like it. I don't feel that the last line of the first stanza has the same rhythm as the rest of the poem, it didn't feel tight. I like ...

Nice handwriting, mine's awful.

I like this, it has excellent imagery and an awesome theme. I love it. It sent a chilled my spine. I agree with everyone else. I don't really have any ...